I just really think you need to slow it down a little.. its way fast. But really nice solid kick you have there, and then the bass sounds a little weird.. But overall great work!
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It's Hardcore, the bpm is standard around 170 (which this track is)
Bass sounds weird cuz of the low bitrate, the full 320 kb/ps piece is much better.
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