A few suggestions
This piece of music doesn't know quite where to go. Even in music that is supposed to go on forever, it's supposed to have direction. You have a basic rhythm and decent sounds but, what really turns me off is the random electric glissando at 2:09. It grinds too much with the staccato sounds you originally used. Also, it sounds like you used the Sytrus arpegiator in FL studio for your background. You might have been better off custom creating an arpegiation so that it would have worked better with that glissando instrument.
4/10
2/5