i like it
it makes me think of some sort of cheesy low budget horror movie. It like torture music but not so serious, pretty good for a first submission song.
There's a certain line that you just don't cross when remixing classical/baroque music and you've just crossed it. Modernizing a piece is one thing, but completely obliterating the musical thought and making the song nothing but dissonance is NOT how you thank Bach for creating this. Sorry to be harsh; I think if you would give it another try, and this time stay a little more true to the idea, you could really develop something nice.
sounds awful, no complexity, jarring, unpleasant to listen to.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.