Sup man!

You should just continue what ur doin'! Its a great intro already if you ask me.

Awesome.

FInally something new that's good.
Man you've gotta build on this, it's awesome.
Just do what you're doing now.
Good luck.

Potential

Sounds like a great start to something, build onto it. You can make this better, it goods, but everything has room for improvement. After this should be an explosion of awesome danceness, in drama we call it peaks and valleys, build up to something. So when I say explode, I mean, don't make me throw my headphones across the room, but make my heart leap out of my chest at the shear sound of it. Like I said, great start, can't wait to hear what comes next. Could use a better title, too. Jk. ;P 5/5 for a great start, 8/10 cause it's not finished yet =P