Dude, Sorry but you should practice your skills a little more before trying to record a song. You keep practicing and playing and you'll get there. Just depends on how much you want to get there.
What were you trying to accomplish?
I don't understand where this was going exactly. I was desperately trying to feel the melody, but I could not find the beat. It really sounded like two songs playing together or random notes bieng hit with a rather monotone drum loop. Work on it.
Hey! this is my first submission. Just give me a brake!