Good Start ^^

Some people may not like the scratchy guitar and say that it isn't clean sounding, but as a listener of semi-industrial style music, the stressed guitar and the unmastered feel makes it better in my opinion ^^ Then again, not everyone has an ear for industrial.

The feeling I get from this piece makes me want to do evil things >P As a first piece, it's a good start. Maybe kick up the base and drums in the melody a bit so they're not overpowered by the guitar as much, they're very faint after the guitar kicks in.
I like the use of the synth orchestra to kind of fill out the middle between the main guitar and the drums ^^

Huh, interesting

Futuristic Spy-vs.-Spy comes to mind for at least the first half.

Great!

Very cool song. Like other people said, it needs a louder and more colorful drum track and a less scratchy guitar. Also the sound introduced at 02:12 sounds... bad (for lack of a real adjective). In my personal opinion, it would be better if you just ditched that part and looked around for something else to fit in at the end. Nice job otherwise, though.

alright

this has a lot of potential. i would emphasize the drums more, make like, y'know, military style drum rolls all over the place

nice job!

great job with starting the clashing notes, they had great effect, but they had no resolution. maybe if the last group in each section were non-clashing
could have been a little cleaner, it all sounded a little mushy, different parts could have been more defined.
-guitar was scratchy
-cymbal rolls definitely need some work
-perhaps a different bell? (1:48, 2:35)