hm...

This is a great start to what could be a great song! But it seems more like something someone would structure a song on, rather than a song itself. It's really good but it just doesn't seem like a full done song.

Later it starts getting a lil filled and I'm thinking its gonna break out bigtime. And tho it sounds good, I'm a lil disappointed. Good chillout "mood setting music" but not somthing I'd listen to often. Be a kool song in a movie for an action scene about to start. Like sum guy gets up and jumps in his car on his way to some place to do something lol. But yea, more of a starting structure than a full out song.

Great try. I'd suggest building on it!