I like this a lot

Good start. It could turn into a bunch of different things, but I can picture this turning into a hard trance song. Do what you want, but I would put in a loud, awesome, bass and get some nice pads in the background. Right now it is dull and the transitions are off some. If you want, PM me and I can try to get you a more detailed review. Now I do not have the time.

Good Potential!