Uhh.....Ehh....Wha?.....
Ehh...Well, the melody is ok, it could have used a bit more work...
However, the vocals, well, they sucked. I liked the idea of the robot voice, but it seems like you just used the default in fruityloops. Also, you should try to make them 'move' a bit more. Its sounding a bit too monotone.For next time, you should lower the volume of the vocals, and bring everything else up(except the bass and the clapping)
And now the bass.. just a bit too loud, and too much of a "plucking" sound. The plucking + the loudness = pain.
And now, time for the uhh, nice..er part of the review.
The basic idea of it seems ok, the lyrics are kind of nice. I liked the melody, even though it was a little too loud.
Well, hopefully this helps you,
SomeoneLessImportant.
magicaxis 
TsukiStuffs 
Superkomix 
wondered 
