Well, I took the liberty of making a better version of my previous submission, it's 3 minutes long, the sounds go together better, and overall I think it's just better. It took some time, but the kicks have a punch that will demolish your ears.
Off Sounds
The bass is very off key to be sure, with the rest of the melody. Change the melodies to be in the same F Flat key that the bass is in, and it would sound SO much better. Since you put some effort in to this, the least i can give you is a 7/10 and a 4/5.
The bass is pretty low, but I wanted there to be a noticeable kick in the song. I very much appreciate your criticism, and will try to improve my song. Thanks.
-Behr
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.
BehrJaw 
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