Needs Work

Moving line is very nice.
When the melody comes in, its a bit square. I'd like to hear some variation.
You seem to have a build up to nothing. There is nothing I'm looking forward to. I'm not sure what you meant by "off-beat," but, I like the creativity included in the percussion (bass drum) in reference to its time placements.

Some ways to fix this:

Rewrite your melody to change pitchs more often then every 2 "counts."

Use a chord progression to essentially "lead" the listener somewhere.