Good start

I kinda like what's going on here. When you add in the melody, don't get rid of all the other sounds, make it louder or the others softer. Also, the ending didn't feel like an ending. It just kinda stopped.

Keep working on this one and some good results are sure to come!

<PS>

nice :P

i liked the beat...
also the melodie at 0:47 was my fav. part... in the end it was very good!
don't give up!!!

I like it :-)

It's very dark and i like it!
The only thing about it is that the ending is a weird and it's a bit short.
Great job overall!
8/10
4/5

MH16

The spirit seems right, but...

the body isn't that good.

Simple synths might be good, but only if the song, as a whole, feels complete with this simplicity. I see too much simple, in all, percussion, bass, main synth. No FX at all, a single patern of percussion too, for and indefinite amount of time, it makes the song lame.

Try using other synth softwares for Bass, for instance. Main Synth is decent, but can have more work on it. Percussion is the real problem. You could use a lot more, to give the music more groove and feeling, which is missing here...

Try working harder on the percussion, and you might see a difference there...

5 for heading on the right direction...