Alright so not a bad tune here it was interesting and i like the vibe you gave off on this, so nice job here i suppose there are some things that can be worked on but thats a few words for later, you do have something interesting. This here was not a bad tune and i do like the slow tune this starts out with, there does seem to need a more ending to it kind of like a sort of climax and whatnot. but sofar i do like what you have presented here. And overall with this piece you have shown that you know how to get things done with some quality, now just a few tweeks here and there.
~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Alright so with this piece it was good and you showed the quality and the imagination thruout maybe a few tweeks hare or there could spice it up. The whole piece was pretty good, i think only the ending was in need of some attention and maybe a bigger finish of an ending, and as mentioned some more climax there at the end.