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i love it im workin on a album and I'm gonna make this one of the slow songs for it. nice song though. ill give FULL CREDIT to you. so dont worry
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My first composition in far too long. This was inspired by my ex-girlfriend, who dumped me almost a year ago. She plays cello and I wrote a song for her a long time ago that was in E minor, and this one's in E major. Yeah, I'm tricky like that. I will be working on it some more still, so I'm posting it for comments and critiques. Please leave a review, I'd really like some advice. Thanks everyone.
This song has recently been updated with improved audio performance.
pathock3 responds:
Hey, sweet. I am flattered that you liked it that much!
Excellent
Great job. The only complaint that I have with it is that it has a little too much repitition for my tastes, but still great. You should stick with music, you will get yourself a good job with that. Go to Juilliard, if at all possible. :P Anyway, great job, 5/5 9/10. Keep up the great work.
pathock3 responds:
It is a tad repetitive, but it was only a first draft. The latest version is pretty hot. As for Julliard, we'll see. I'm starting my senior year in high school this fall, but I don't know where I will apply. I am planning to major in musical composition at the moment, but I have been known to change my mind. Thanks.
a warm autum evening
Even though its summer here I have the feeling of a still warm autum evening. Its a very beautiful and calming melody. If you could make a whole song out of it, would be amazing, cause it seems very short to me. But no rush there, lol.
Did your exgirlfriend ever played the piece you wrote for her I wonder.
pathock3 responds:
I love hearing about what people think about when listening to my music. Yeah, I need to expand this a bit when I get another idea. She has not played this piece, but I expect she will this year.
I love the cello.
It was a genereally beautiful piece. I love the soft, mellow tone to it.
What you might want to do is louden the piano a bit, it's a tad too soft to be heard nicely. Plus it makes the cello tiring after a while.
I love when the two cellos come together.
I play the bass, I hope to switch to the cello next year :)
Nice ending, by the way. Sweet little piece. I think your girlfriend will appreciate this. I can so see it--you composing, she playing :)
-Vesta J
pathock3 responds:
You would give it a 9. Ruining my perfect 10 streak! lol imma jk. To be honest, I think a lot of what you didn't like can be fixed in a different recording I have saved in WAV format, therefore incompatible with Newgrounds. I had to settle for the lesser mp3 version.
*Note to all that take the time to read review responses: A superior recording can be obtained by providing me with your email address and asking for it. It really is a very different sound.
Specifically, the piano is louder and has a much better ring to it, making it sound much less synthesized. The cello is more expressive sometimes, although the only complaint that can be made is that the cello is a little awkwardly inconsistent in the way it plays some notes... but overall I like it much better. Yes, cello, the beautiful, mellow string instrument. I respect all of its players. Ah, so you liked the ending this time! Yeah, me too. At least the piano part. The synthesized cello sounds a little funny... I sure hope she plays it. I can play most of the piano part, so that'd be pretty cool... I can dream at least.
Thanks a lot Vesta
Amazing...interesting complilation....
This is one of the most beautiful pieces I have heard on Newgrounds. Seriously, usually I dont bother to leave comments but this warrents one ten times over, but dont worry i wont spam this song page.
The flow and rythm was absolutely ingenious. And the way you melded the melody in there was great. To be honest, I rarely find music like this appealing due to its slow rythm, but the melody just pulled me in.
As for the story, I can totally relate. and the imagery created by this piece definitly reflects the message that you are trying to convey.
Now that I've made my little oration, I'll rate your piece from start to finish...
Flow/Rythm: 10.5
Melody: o><o (bad imitation of infinity loop)
Imagery: 10.0
Overall: see melody (it is so far the best I've heard of this genre)
I have to say thank you for your contribution to Newgrounds and the world of music in general, keep it up
pathock3 responds:
You know, I've gotten some complimentary reviews before, but this has to be one of the nicest one's I've ever gotten. Not much I can say to that other than thanks. I like your grading template there; I think I may use that. Might change it a bit, something like:
Melody:
Harmony:
Rhythm:
(extra spot, if something was really outstanding, like imagery in this case, or needed extra work)
Overall:
Not much different. Anyways, only thing left to say is that without the harmony, the melody is nothing. Just listen, the melody is just an arpeggio. But the harmony is what makes the melody interesting.
It goes: I iii IV
Yeah, I really like this song a lot. One of my best ever. All the reviews have been so positive, it's really wonderful. Thanks again Rocko.
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