This has a contemplative melody, and a nice feel to it, but it never delivers. Where are your 1/4 hammering beats that give this energy ? Your pumping bass. Sorry but this doesnt perform for me..
now this is better
From what I can tell this is all you, and its a pretty good start. It does repeat, and the drumline is a bit weak, but it's an improvement. I would say keep working at this song. So far it has a good sound. Definatly try to work on the drums a bit more, and add some variation to the synths. you don't have to go all out, but aliitle work seems to be required. Keep at the music creation, practice makes perfect.
im fairly new to this program and i dont know how to u fx and stuff like that and i asume u have fruityloops so i would appreciate it if u could e-mail me and help me out or anyone else in that manner. thanx