I like the vocal samples and the catchy, energetic intro. The intro does drag on for a bit long, though - 48 seconds, in my estimation. Maybe it would feel less slow to progress if you had introduced the different instruments gradually, or even skipped right to the first verse at :25. I like the melancholy vocals, crisp drums, and groovy guitar riffs, though. The lyrics themselves are also really good. The mix could’ve been a bit more loud and distinct here - I especially think the lead guitar could use a boost, although it’s easy to overuse compression on electric guitars IMO.
The instrumental content in this piece gets a tad repetitive, too. There’s a near-constant energy level throughout the piece, which is not always conducive to maximizing listener engagement. At some point, an atmospheric breakdown or frantic solo would’ve been more than welcome. The only time the harmonic framework shifts is at 3:26, and even then it has about the same intensity as the vocal section before it. I also might have liked to see more variation in the vocal refrain the second time around.
Overall, I really like the sound design, rhythmic content, vocal work, and thematic content of the piece. The composition could use a bit more variety, though, and the mixing could be a bit tighter. Still, you’ve captured a great 90s “coffee shop rock” sort of vibe with this one. Keep at it, Paddy Davis! ^_^
Mixing, mastering, and balance
1.5/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
1/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
1.75/2
Instrumentation and sound design
1/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1.25/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
.75/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
.5/1
Composite score
7.75/10
PaddyDavis 
