what do u use for the music? it sounds cool :0

I like the chords at the beginning. The drums could stand to be a bit louder and more up-front in the mix, but otherwise I’m not going to nitpick the mixing. The vocals seem rather uninspired - the tone of them lacks a sense of passion, and often they’re flat and off-beat. In fact, at 1:01, I can tell you’re intentionally holding out some of the notes towards the end of the phrase so that you can get back on the beat. It’s probably better to re-record the vocals entirely then come up with Band-Aid solutions like that. That said, the lyrics themselves are pretty good - you’ve got a decent rhyme scheme and meter laid out, and the subject matter is relatable.

The instrumental track is a bit bland and repetitive. At some point, it would’ve been nice to break up the verse/post-chorus structure of the song with a solo or bridge. That said, I like how the piece ends abruptly, especially after the lines “take my hand, and you will see,” which foreshadow that there’s more to come.

Overall, I’d encourage you to work more on the vocal editing, timing, and inflection, and also flesh out the structural elements of your piece more. When you feel like you’ve done so, feel free to send me a PM, and I’ll give you some more feedback. Until then, keep at it, Diamondman! :)

Mixing, mastering, and balance
1/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
.5/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
.5/2
Instrumentation and sound design
.5/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
.75/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
.5/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
.25/1
Composite score
4/10

Made me laugh, but the voice ruins the song

the voice ruins it im sorry

Pretty nice, but the voice feels a bit boring.