Ah, nothing like a good uprising. I like the dreamy synth arpeggios at the beginning and the bass that gradually fades in until :30. The distorted atmospheric synth at :31 is pretty neat, although by :38 the texture sounds a little too bottom-heavy and the clap is seriously weak in the mix. The crisp beats and rhythmic syncopations at 1:02 are nice, but also don’t introduce much novel harmonic content or dynamic melodies or anything. The prominent hi-hats at 1:41 are nice, but otherwise the compositional details and gritty, mid-range bass at 2:04 don’t do enough to add variety and a strong sense of direction to the piece later on. Overall, the sound design and production quality are both quite strong here, but the composition feels a bit bland and underwhelming. I’d encourage you to keep working on this piece - with a well-chosen lead and maybe a bit of a boost to the upper-mids in the mix, this would be a real banger. Also, I really like the atmospheric outro here, the way the reverb sneaks up on you like an ocean wave as you have your back turned. Yeah. Keep at it, Ultimatepalmtree! ^_^

Mixing, mastering, and balance
1.75/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
.75/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
1.25/2
Instrumentation and sound design
1/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
.5/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
.75/1
Composite score
7.5/10

I agree with octopus, the written story is a nice touch. I'm feeling an almost madmax angst coming on. I really appreciate the industrial elements!

I feel this piece could use mastering compression to take full advantage of what sounds like a clean mix you have going on here.

I would like more complimentary panned hihats or subtle delays prior to 1:40. Perhaps even you could pan them a bit less aggressively to hear more of the interplay between cymbals. More crashes would be nice too for accents. I feel like more high end percussion would really sell this track for me.

Great work! Thanks for coming out to NGUAC!

The little story you made to go along with the song perfectly fits the timing of events and atmosphere from beginning to end, that's really cool! It starts with a more relaxed intro which slowly builds up into something intense, with a little break in the middle, and then the rest just keeps up the intensity. The instruments you used were also very good for the theme/mood and the bass was so funky and cool. The end also worked very well as it picks up in the machine sounds, which signifies the victory. Awesome work, keep it coming!!