But doesn't make any sence. For something that you threw together because you were bored, not so bad. I've made some pretty mediocre stuff when I was bored. I didn't bother posting them on this site either.
So lets get down to the nails and tacks. This would have been a very good piece (by "very good" i mean as far as hip-hop goes, which is very low on my standards) if the notes would have made more sense. As the last person said, it was too dissonant. But this wouldn't be hard to change, just a few extra minutes and those notes would fit like an asian penis through the eye of a needle, catch my drift?
The drum beat is okay, but what happened to your melody? It sounds so dissonant and somewhat dreadful. Even putting the "Hey!" in the background doesn't make it a better sounding song... well it kind of does, as it keeps the song going and I usually hear that sound in cool songs, but it doesn't help much when the rest of the song is cacophonous. If this was a real attempt, please, keep up practicing. Get your melodies down... even for loops!