A flowing river damned before the ocean....
You have seven chords here... The first three are beautiful. After that...well the progression is rather...uninviting. Now I can't really determine the flow of your progressions but honestly some of those later chords seems a better under expressed and random. <<<Not a bad thing, but in my opinion they could have been truly beautiful if thought it more clearly.
Basically the bass notes lose focus...and when that happens the top half usually goes astray. Hell I actually went ahead and put these chords down in FL Studio and...against my better judgement had to finish them in a way I would have...
It's like I can see them...I can see what you wanted but you couldn't quite put it down that way...I don't know if that's the case but it really feels that way...I don't know maybe it's just me.
On a side note...I like the percussion. And the actual melody is rather nice.
Constructively though, God I hate to tell people how I think they should make music...but don't take it that way. I'm not trying to tell you how to make music because by no means am I "a better" beat maker. Whatever better really means. But maybe try, just maybe this helped me alot...making songs with a form. Kind of like they tell a story. When I make my newer music I think if it as a ScreenPlay...with Acts. And a full story. Some of my most popular beats, (ones that sell UP there in the $$$ tree) follow this.
I'm not saying think of it the way I do. As much as making a beat is a feeling...it has to have a solid form. Rather it be a box...a globe...or the universe...have the talent is making others feel what you felt. It's hard to do in music...but when you can do it..That's when people will finally say, "Hey Your really good at this."
I still love the first three chords so much though I can give you a 8...minus 2 for in my opinion confusing me and not completing them...
Kannon1 
