ummm

practice and work out something better
this was average

er... ?

i dont know. it sounds like you have too much distortion to know what to do with it... its just a bunch of random open string alternate picking... and alot of it sounds to fast for you to keep with the beat ... and most of it sounds weak... probably because of the pickups in your guitar...

but keep practicing and dont go into drop c or whatever its in and think you are the best. im not putting you down but it just sounds like alot of time or effort isnt put into your playing...