Quarl AIM 2022 Review
Composition/Structure (0-10), Production (0-10), Emotion (0-10), Relevance to Artwork (0-10)
BusanBlack, Psalm Palms: 9,7,9,7 (32/40)
Before having listened to the track, I'll make sure to point out that you can always gush a little more about your music when you're writing about it. The people on this website are your peers and we love to share ideas and inspire each other. We have a lot of global artists so sometimes conveying ideas in English is impossible but I also understand when a user sticks to their native language and I can manage Google translate. Never be afraid to express yourself, our work can give us a sense of existence, accomplishment, and meaning. I like to know more about the people I bump into here. Other users also helped connect the illustrations to their music by writing small stories, which is a little overboard but it only helped them defend the idea that the illustration and the music were somehow related to each other. Everyone has a different style or approach but I'm left to interpret what yours was. Guilt the judges into recognizing your intentions with a small manifesto.
The song itself is very chill and written with love. I noticed that you played with panning data,
a lot of other users failed to make use of that stereo element. Panning has all sorts of advantages, disadvantages, and functions but typically the bass gets mixed into the center to give structure to the sound field. Thinner frequencies and textures are better served with a panning bias. Another artist uploaded chiptune and I was very forgiving with production issues on them because that genre lent itself to being a little thin. You have a progressive mix of styles and sounds so it's a little hard to pinpoint my production criticism. On one hand, I can respect your creative integrity in sticking to that hip-hop drum kit and funky bass line but maybe the entire track could have benefit from the same level of energy? It's like the track wanted to be half chiptune and half RNB but even chiptune sounds can convey high fidelity.
The image is nice to look at and the music is comfortable to listen to but you definitely could have taken advantage of the authors bio to better direct us with some more words or ideas. I'm not 100% convinced that the image and the music belong together. There are birds in the image and you could have used chiptune blips and bleeps to convey bird song, or literal bird song samples. Sinewaves in particular are very flexible for that kind of thing. Some digital distortion on the drum kit might have better tied the jazz kit into the pixel setting of the image. The melodies are very peaceful but the drum kit comes across a little amateurish and stylistically at odds with the rest of the track, and 8-bit drum kit would have played into this track nicely. Given that the drum samples have a live drum vibe I'm torn in how robotically they were presented. A drum kit benefits from dynamic changes to volume, as a drummer myself I can point out how a drummer conveys control with volume. Velocity is one of the few tools a drum kit can use to convey emotions. Again, by making the drum kit digital you might have better fit the chiptune vibe while needing to think less about things like dynamics. It's a great song but it sounds a little at odds with itself and the illustration.
I'm going to point out that there were some great artists and musicians in this competition, worth giving your peers some listens if you haven't yet. You have a wonderful day Busan, keep writing great stuff :]
BusanBlack 
