deff. good attempt
i like the idea of this song. if that made sense -_- but i think you should go back and clean it up some more, IMO some Harder beats or just amp up the bass in general. make the melody clearer and kinda give some feeling, i say almost a blusey feel. but W/e it just feels like its a Diamond in the ruff, still a diamond, but with some good work it could be briliant instead of pretty good. that being said good job, its still a good track just needs some work. 8/10 4/5. look forward to listening to more