This makes me imagine being in an apocalypse. For the next songs you make, I suggest you use a scale to make better notes, but the sounds are fine. This is fine, but I know you can improve next time, cheer up! :D

I like the stuff you're doing with weird meters/time signatures, and the proggy song structure, feels like a bit of a journey.

A coupla things to try working on: melodically it's a bit all over the place, and some of the melodies feel like they don't "resolve"... this is a tricky thing to get your head around but sometimes working within one or two basic scales can really help. I dunno how familiar you are with music theory stuff, it can be pretty daunting, if you want some good starting points flick me a message.

The other point to make is the sound design is very... claustrophobic, kinda suffocating... that can be a really good thing but I feel like if some more breathy, brighter and less compressed sounds creep in from time to time, that would really help. Like you're letting the listener breath a bit before sucking all the air out of the room a bit, and alternating between that. I can imagine the bits where the drums drop out getting really nice and open, airy and light sounding and then the drums come back and it's super dense and intense again.

Anyway, hope that's not too much of an essay haha! Definitely some interesting ideas here with a lot of potential :)