Amazing job Tama! I love the writing and the artstyle as it feels VERY Scott pilgrim(and I mean that in a good way!!) that being said, with regards to word bubbles I would maybe shrink the text in the bubbles since I feel they’re a bit cramped! Typically with word bubbles you’d shrink the text enough so that an “H” would fit into the corners. I’m hooked by the sudden twist at the end lol. Looking forward to the rest of it!
(COMIC) BIRD OF PREY - PROLOGUE PART 1
Sharethis ain't the next chapter, it's a whole new book
this is the FIRST HALF of the prologue! second half will exist. someday.
kare's an aspiring guitarist who's come to america to make his dreams come true. he even makes his first friends! sweet guitar boy, you have no clue what you're getting into...
so
for those not in the know!!!!!!!!!!! this is a REBOOT to my comic BIRD OF PREY, which i started back in middle school. a lot's changed in my head and i think i have a better story in mind now, also the old art is fugly as all hell ew. so i figured, why not go back and start again?
the contest gave me extra motivation hhhehehe
btw the posters on the window on page 7 were friend suggestions hehe
i had to condense a lot to fit the page limit aaa, i hope the story still works wwwww. i also wouldve liked to do more with backgrounds tbh,, but those take me forever and i've a deadline to meet, gomennnnnnnnnnnasorryyyyyyyyy
thank u for reading i need a long break its finals week now HJHSKJHJK
You know, I don't usually read comics. But your art style? The linework? It's just so damn sharp I couldn't take my eyes off of it. Great work!
That... was certainly NOT where I expected this comic would go! The ending feels a bit abrupt, shocking even, but that's unavoidable when you have to condense a much bigger plot into 16 pages. I will say that it's definitely interesting and makes me want to read more. Your uncomplicated art style works with this story, and I enjoyed the characters - I thought they were pretty well set up even in the small space they were given, Mackenzie in particular. Good work and good luck in the contest!
Oooh, this is an interesting prologue! I like the mystery of the number! And that mystery character that busts in at the end!! And don't worry, you're not the only one who is revamping their old content! (coughcoughCorvid Kid)
I felt that the only thing that was a bit lacking was the design of the main character Kare. I found that in some scenes I mistook him for a background character. Unless that is intentional, then don't mind me.
Tamag0 responds:
ty ty!! im excited for corvid kid too!!!!
yes, kare does look a bit plain but it is intentional ;) he'll change into his Main Character Look after the prologue!!
Tamaaaaaa, you did it! I'm so proud of you!
I really like how you makw blacks and whites, you totally have an amazing control at it, and everything is so clean,
Now it's time to read the old version and admire your improvement >:')))) can't wait for your next chapters!
Tamag0 responds:
WAAA TY PAMMMMM but also NOOOO THE OLD ONES SO UGLYYYYY NOOOOOOO
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