Not bad, but that perspective needs some work.
So that's why Deimos wears that jacket.
EDIT: went back to fix the perspective and a few other details
Context: This is a parody scene of my Madness Combat fanfiction, "Somewhere in Bermuda". It diverges from the canon in that all female grunts live in Bermuda with no knowledge of their male counterparts in Nevada. The plot kicks off when a select group of female grunts are taken to Nevada.
Not bad, but that perspective needs some work.
True! Still practicing until I get the hang of it
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