Well this was pretty cool, I like the comic style of this and you have some nice character work and very colorful, the pink text is ok but I think you should have all the text in a bubble not just some, anyways nice work here with this comic style and I look forward to more soon.
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the pink text is ok but I think you should have all the text in a bubble not just some
Straight into the action, huh! The pink captions could use some enforcing background or other color, and the speech bubbles could use some darker color. NIce idea having gender-specific text, but the pink is a bit bright. How many pages will this span? Keep it going!
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