This one's actually pretty good! A couple things I notice in terms of critiques are that it took me a bit to see the tears, and a few of the 100s could be written more cleanly. But those are just tiny nitpicks.
This one's actually pretty good! A couple things I notice in terms of critiques are that it took me a bit to see the tears, and a few of the 100s could be written more cleanly. But those are just tiny nitpicks.
thank you! ^^
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