And here with this one you really show alot of detail and bring that forward and that color is deep to the story is notbad and this was notbad I thaught you could have stretched it out a bit longer but was still a great piece and can't wait for the next one so nice job here
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Stretch it out a bit more maybe a scene or two more
The beginning of a fine tale!
Really digging that 'exit to reality' sign. :) It starts...
He was a fry cook who slipped and fell into a vat of chips.
I've always wondered why he was half potato.
You'll wonder a lot of things soon!
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