This is sarcastically funny!
I feel like if the lines weren't just straight black it'd give the picture a whole lot more... idk it'd be pretty.
How very Japanese.
I like it a lot, my one complaint would be the gradients on their legs (where my eyes go first when I see girls, of course) and arms. As an "artist," I understand the temptation to do this.
But it would help the sort of cartoony style you have to do the distinct zoned shading like you do on their clothes - where there are separate shades of grey.
Anyway, cool beans. Keep them coming
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