You did a great job again! I personally thought that the second page was a little bit better in some aspects, though. Some words towards the beginning were a little hard to read because of the way that you write your ts. Using one singular line to make them rather than drawing a line straight down and then making another line to cross it makes them look like ds instead. I also noticed that you used a lot more punctuation and such in the previous page, which sort of makes it inconsistent because there's less of that here. You should stick to either using proper grammar on all pages, or being light on it. Other than that, I don't have any more suggestions! I did see you improve your drawings here compared to the last page, which was really cool! I like the way deimos KO's eb here, that was really creative and fun and I'd like to see something cool like that again! And the drawings here are so dynamic and full of energy and character, it's really great! And I'm glad you took the previous advice to heart, you had the perfect ratio of text to picture in the fight scenes! Keep it up!! :D

Your lineart and comic panels continue to amaze, so clean and precise. Keep up the good work. :3