as its my first post i am happy if anyone wishes to criticise my art in any way, as im hoping to improve

this is an OC (player girl) created by someone else that i choose to redraw. she was a dark deception oc but i dont think that warrants a tag for it. she dosnt have a left eye so thats why there is not one there

i want honest feedback please tell me exactly what could be done to make it better, thanks