hehe
good effort. unfortunately there were some seriously odd things going on there. your cinematography was pretty cool but you were overusing it, and in spaces where it really sucked to use. IE. he's walking slowly to his closet to get his gun and its cut like its an action sequence. haha
i don't believe for a split second that 3D render 2nd to last under 'art' at the end is yours. shame on you