Reviews for Welcome To New York

[House-Of-Leaves]

Can I be honest?

Good.

It wasn't terrible. It wasn't even bad. But there's something that bothered me about it.

I think I have an idea of what sort of mood you were going for with this movie...a sort of sentimental look at NYC. The music set that up well, almost made it sad...but. This is where I have issues. Not with the sound..but with nit-picky things about the animation.

When you attempt an 'artistic view of the city' as you put it, it's a good thing not to confuse your viewers.

First...the planet that we zoom in on...is that earth? Why is it colored like the moon? (Tho, that might be an artistic choice, and if that's the case, so be it.)

I know that the rest of the style was your artistic choice. But there were details that were here and there, that stood out to me as a whole. When the bird is flying through the forest with the...egg-glowy-looking thing, there's a tree that disappears. Likely, it's just a frame that you missed in editing or whatever, but it stands out a lot.

This one..it's not an error, just a question (yeah, I'm going in chronological order here). When you have a representation of the Empire state building, what are the dotted lines supposed to represent? Again, I know that it's an artistic piece...but I'm just curious.

Okay...the ripples in the water. Having them come together instead of the opposite way (starting together and spreading out) just doesn't look right.

Statue of Liberty...very nicely drawn. Why the hell are the stars moving? Stars don't move. If it was meant to show movement in the background, then...well. Having them move together would have worked. Having them bounce around is just...nah.

My biggest pet peeve of this film: the falling leaves. Instead of the leaves actually falling...they moved up and down. Like the stars.

Yes, I know I'm being a picky woman. But this is what stood out at me, and what took away from the movie for me. It's why I only voted 2 for it. Maybe my standards are high. But it's not the art that I had an issue with...it was the scripting. The little details missed that messed with the continuity of the movie.

I'm done. :) All in all, it was good! Keep going. :)

HellScorpion responds:

Artistic view as in: NO boundaries, NO limits, ANYTHING goes. Isn't that what art is??? There's no right way to interpret art, and I don't think you understand that yet. Those dotted lines are supposed to represent city lights. Yes, I know stars don't move but you must understand, NY is a different city. It's practically a different world. Come and you'll see. For a beginner, your standards are way too high. I'd like to see you make a movie someday.

Anyway, I appreciated your review.

[BKred]

Not bad

I think you have good potential as a flash artist. The concept and choice of music were very good, though the graphics were quite simple. I'd say, work on that. Practice makes perfect.

HellScorpion responds:

Thanks, but I think I'm going to take a break from Flash... it seems like my effort isn't really paying off..

[WarMachine]

Nice Job

Had a bit of an artistic feel about it. Good work.

HellScorpion responds:

Thanks, I was going for that feeling.

[Flamehair]

Hrm...

If by artistic you mean an excuse for poor animation skills, okay.

The concept is good, you just need better skills at drawing and animation.

Try submitting it again when you get a better chance at it. Keep up the work. I really want to see this again once it gets better.

HellScorpion responds:

I know the animation wasnt 100% smooth, but how can you say my drawing wasn't good enough? The Park Slope houses look almost EXACT, and so does the Statue of Liberty. Well, thanks for watching, I guess.

[God-of-Protection]

can be reworked

The music was a good choic but some things come off as kind of odd, for one the first scene that shows the bridge it looks like see buildings on one side the underisde of the bridge and then water as tall as the building, whether you were trying to make that an above veiw of the bridge or what I don't know but it didn't looke right. I really like the water effects. the Ferris Wheel can be done alot more smoothly, what you do is make the ferris wheel a graphic but take the cars off of it, then mark it on the ferris wheel where the cars supposed to be, then make the ferris wheel rotate using a motion tween (they tell how to rotate in the motion tween tutorial) then make the cars separate graphics, you might need to use a lot of keyframes to do this, but make sure you're one layer higher then the ferris wheel then put the car on the spots where you marked then move the animation foward a few frames to see where the spot is move the car to that spot with a motion tween. repeat as neccesary

HellScorpion responds:

Umm...I think I know what you mean, thanks. Oh yea, and I was trying to make a view of below the bridge...