One suggestion
i like the Riding Hood in the write-up. Perhaps you should make her synch up with the one in the actual piece. Like she could have flashbacks--graphically violent flashbacks if you like even. Not the prettified portrayals of Grandma swallowed whole and still alive after the Wolf is cut open, but something more sinister and gruesome. Thus we would get the sense of her mindfucking. And maybe you could have some shots of her walking around in like a black velvet robe with a hood obscuring most of her face. Well maybe a dark, dark red. i like the idea; there are just so many ways that you can go with it. The concept is strong, it just needs to be fleshed out [if you will] more. Oh, one more thing ... the Wolf outside of the closet should probably look a bit more vicious. i realize your probably still working on your artistic development, but Riding looks solid--especially her face. And so does the rest of the room. At any rate, work with this some more.