it was okay
the story was pretty good, it was alittle confusing. i could barely hear the voices, and the subtitles were off. try fitting the whole line in one go, even if you have to make the letters smaller, that way you can pause between speech. unless they say a lot, then you might wanna do more than one, but for this one, there wasnt that much speech, so it wouldve been fine. the animation was pretty good. there are the obvious things though, ya know, like working on making the arms bigger, to match teh body, and the heads smaller. you have a good style, it just needs to be perfected. but i understand that you did this all on the computer, so thats pretty awesome, keep it up!