I gave this a semi-bad review for two reasons.
1) You took one of the most emotional, empowering scenes of Eva, the scene which put Shinji over the edge, the scene which took the peak of the Angels's evolution and brought them closer with that of mankind, and you shortened it.
There was a reason that scene was over 5 minutes long, dude. The entire time Shinji sits in his Eva, Kaoru awaits his death, and the utter silence from outside of the Eva is symbolically supposed to counter-balance the crying inside of the mech.
This TOTALLY ruins the entire scene!
and 2) YOU JUST SPOILED SO MANY FREAKING PEOPLE ON WHAT HAPPENS IN EVANGELION!