Cheers! Fun song - I love stuff in off kilter rhythms. The little quirky broken lyric phrases support that too.
Only comment is that the vocals felt like they were mixed for a hard rock ballad; they are very forward. That's cool if that's what you're going for. People may be expecting more of an alternative kind of vibe given the intro.
That's a really good piece of advice, thank you. Certainly the vocal mix is suited to the last half where things pick up but I now realize I could've made it fit the instruments of the first half better. I'll keep it in mind!
i think the core idea of this song is phenomenal, even better than your last one. /however/ the song has a couple of problems that really nag me...
first off, i dont think the song really starts until "what I want for me", which is about halfway through the song! once you do get to that point, THE SONG IS AMAZING. but that intro just... it doesn't really do anything? It's nice, it's chill, it's not offensive at all, but compared to the absolutely bonkers good second half, it almost seems like it should be part of another song.
second off, why on earth does "we all carry it" fade out?? i mean the sighing vocals you fade into are really nice and stuff but, ugh, its such a wasted opportunity for an AMAZING transition! like imagine if instead of fading it built and built into the "i need to be loved" section??? IT WOULD BE SO GOOD.
finally, the mix needs some more love tbh. i disagree strongly with proudaardvark, the vocals (particularly in the "i need to be loved" section) need to be brought much more to the front! at a section like 2:30 they're dangerously close to falling into the "background instrumentation" bucket, which makes no sense at all for a song which should so clearly be driven by vocals! and also, imagine how good this song would sound with bigger drums in that climactic final section?!? UGH
you still get 10/10 from me because this song is amazing. so i guess with those issues fixed it would be an 11/10 or so... =P
Haha, well all good comments. Tbh I agree with most of it and I knew about much of it when I released the song. I was limited by time on this one; I knew I wouldn't have (and I haven't) time to work on it in the last three days of the round, so it got released with some errors and incomplete thoughts.
At the end of the day, I think the core idea is really solid even if my execution of it isn't. You have some great musical ideas for it!
I actually preferred to the vocals when they were out in the front. Your voice is a gorgeous asset of yours. I really enjoyed listening to this, but it did feel somewhat unfinished in terms of what could be added to it, but you've gotten some really nice advice and you already know this! Your harmonies are SO beautiful, and I love that you have your own well-thought out style that runs through your songs.
A pleasure to listen to.
You're very kind, thank you.
This is fantastic!
I don't agree with Johnfn actually. The beginning is completely necessary especially considering the lyrics. I love your voice.
I do think I see what other people are saying with it missing something. I think it's not big enough when it comes to the chorus. Like there needs to be more desperation and near shouting levels and pitches. But that's just my opinion.
Great work and good luck
That I'm getting comments agreeing on certain aspects is super useful; definitely lets me know I missed something. If I make it through, next round's track won't make the same mistakes...
Thanks!
Speaking of love.. I love it! Well done ;)
Glad you do!