Cool
I'll try to be nice :P
I disliked the melodysynths a lot. The introtune was killing untill that other synth came. I could imagine it being much cooler if you just prompted a PHAT bass-line in there. The drums, it all sounded a little loud. Hey cool drum variations at times!
Spoken of variation, thats one of the strong points of this song. I loved some parts, but some parts were less in comparison to the others. That says more about the good parts than the bad parts though.
Overall I'd suggest using a little less random melodies. Really, that peaky intro synth rules and you should build a track around that, together with a little less layers maybe, and with more emphasis on the bass without the randomness distracting from it.
I hope I explained myself good enough, lol.
4/5, 8/10
ps: u díd a good job, dont forget that