Well...
It's quite obvious from the use of the popping snare that you aren't very educated in combining different metal riffs. Like, in the begining, the synth told me this was going to be a symphonic black metal song. When the guitar kicked in, it sounded more melodic than symphonic. And when the slow part and synth were playing together, I got the nu metal feeling.
Now the breakdown. If you're going to have one in your song, at least don't have the drums breakdown as well. The double-pan effect was nice, but the use of high-hat and crash threw the balance of bass drum and rythym guitar.
It doesn't make me think of vampires, but more of a man with black armor riding a horse through a burning forest.
All in all, it was still a nice piece of work, 6/10 and 3/5.