I'm adding/removing a star for everything that I dislike/like. Starting at 0.
The instruments+
The tone of how it feels+
Electronic sounds+
Actually trying to make a remix++
GD fans making a review on this (i'm one of them, i'm not gonna give a point neither remove one)
How much I can spread my imagination with this song++++
The tempo - It's 3/4, so -
Literally typing my first review +
Okay, let's add it up. Nine points, 4.5 stars. In the NG rating, not the review rating, I'm giving it a 5 because I like you.
Reviews for "Within The Sadness (1f1n1ty Remix)"
Onefin responds:
Aw, no 3/4? People seem to think 4/4 is the natural, intrinsic way of music, but I'd argue that 3/4 is actually more natural, since your heartbeat pumps in approximately 3/4.
Woooaah, that's just awesome! I've got FL studio for a while now, but I'm still at the part hanging around and clicking every button…
I think there's nothing wrong about the song, It's perfect, the transitions are nice and smooth and the melody is relaxing, happy and a little sad too I suppose. Anyways, I love this song, and I should really get to work if I want to obtain results ! Good luck for the continuation.
Onefin responds:
There's always something wrong with my songs. No such thing as complete perfection with music, really.
The melody is completely intended to be sad, although I feel my interpretation in a busier mix ruined the taste.
liked the song homeslice! The key changes bring it all together and the percussion. The only only thing I'm feeling weird is the sudden speed-up is distracting and It sort of takes away from the ambient feel. But otherwise it's cool. No mystery dungeon bias here; although it brings back memories.
9/10 m9
Onefin responds:
Thanks! Glad you liked the key changes, and I definitely had fun writing those drums.
The speed-up is meant to add more energy going into the dark drop. It's a sort of preparation step to make the next section less drastic of a change. Not necessarily the most effective way to do it, but that was the intention, and I can understand if it was jarring for you. ;)
I like how the mood at the beginning is both furtive and somewhat cute. There’s this great dreaminess about it, and the quirky drums at :40 add a lot to the texture. It progresses a little slowly at times, but the atmosphere truly makes up for that IMO. The production quality is also really solid. The kick might’ve been a bit too heavy for a piece this spacey, though. The harmonic direction of this piece is phenomenal: there are some great subtle modulations, like at 2:14. I really wish you had built up the energy more gradually into 2:35. The build-up at 2:27 kinda came out of nowhere, and it only lasts 8 seconds - not really on par with the overall pace of the piece during the first 2 minutes. That said, I thought the breakdown at 3:14 was great. The pensive vibe there was amazing, and the well-panned percussion was extremely appealing. Overall, the piece is very smooth-flowing. You’ve pulled off some pretty epic transitions here, my friend. I’m not sure you quite made this piece coherent enough as is desirable, though. The ending sounded conclusive, but I don’t recall hearing a piano during the first 5 minutes of the piece, so perhaps throwing one in there at the end was questionable. Also, the main climax of the piece occurs less than halfway through, which damages your effort to keep this piece engaging toward the end of an already-long 6 minutes. Having listened to the original, I’d say you’ve certainly added to it considerably. Despite this being a remix, I’m giving you full credit for originality. The thing that hurt you the most was probably the lack of some core structural repetition, actually. Other than that, really solid work! Keep it up, man. ;D
8.75/10
Onefin responds:
Hey, I made it into the competition! WOO! Alright what do we have here
Heavy kick, eh? I guess that's something to keep in mind. I tend to just fall on heavy kicks from pretty much anything, as not-heavy kicks tend to get weird on the mixing side.
At 2:14, I sped up the tempo to try and ease the way into 2:27 and kinda tell the listener
"this track is about to go places", but I guess it wasn't enough pull :/
I'll admit, I had to look up "pensive" to see what it meant.
Epic transitions? Kind of surprising, given that I have a history of really bad transitions. I'll see if I can replicate what I did here in my NGAUC attempt.
The only reason I added a piano at the end was because there was a piano right at 3:47 which doesn't actually sound like one but is one. At the end, I was all like "what instrument should conclude the piece?" and I saw the piano there and was like, "let's go for it".
I thought the climax happened pretty much exactly halfway through. It starts at 2:35 and ends at 3:14, setting the midpoint at about 2:54. The piece is 5:34 long, which means half is at 2:46. Which means the climax is pretty much exactly at, if not further than, halfway. :/
Hey, thanks for listening to the original! Some people don't bother and they're all like, "I can't comment on your composition because it's not original" and don't even go see just how much originality I try to add into my remixes.
Lack of core structural repetition. Got it. Taking notes. Let's do this.
Forget chillstep I'd call this feelstep ;3;. I think this could work both as a relaxing upbeat and a sad song at the same time, just depending on how I'm feeling that day.
Onefin responds:
Hey, it's Etzer! How are you today :3