I get that its your first game ever made, but I think you might have went too big on your promises with you claimed to make. I think it was interesting, and if it had a larger storyline and some improved dialogue it would make for an enjoyable story. But try not to promise more than you make ok?
Still enjoyed playing it, and applaud you for your efforts. Don't let criticism keep you from trying again to work on projects! You could always expand on this one as well!