Mixing Issues, PROGRESSION!
Very very commercial sounding, not really long enough for trance... I would make it progress a lot more, start small and bring it up! Mixing wise, the drum was a little loud and there was no bass to be heard. And the lead was repetitive....
Not bad though... carte blanche is a classic.
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I don't think you remade it. Although this is not the original melody, I'm pretty sure you used this midi here or something similar:
http://www.novagorica.com/m4dj/midi/v eracocha.mid
I found that when I was searching for the chord progression for my own remix.
Ugh, it made me bounce though, so I still like it =p. Just check out what I said earlier.