I thought this was funny and different, but the actual speech about women's bodies at the end could have been worded better. The intent got sort of muddled with clumsy phrasing.
Not sure why the bartender was the grandpa, and where did the other two friends go...? That was confusing. And I think the speech at the end would have made more sense if the bartender had suggested showing of tits in lieu of ID rather than the kid... just little things. Overall I liked the style.
Reviews for "The Bartender"
Mallowin responds:
I actually didn't write this script, I animated it, but I would say Chris has done a great job with it. The Bartender was made clear he was the grandpa in the end, and this was used as the ending's "WOAH TWIST!". As for the friends not being shown after the first scene, my intention was to show all three of the characters standing outside, but I wanted to enforce the fact they were only minor characters, so I ended up hollowing them out in the silhouette and making everything black. This also worked great with not revealing Steven's outfit until his first line to the bartender. I considered showing them at the door sticking their faces in during the monologue, but that would have driven the attention away too much after introducing them so quickly. Lastly, I personally believe it's up for the viewer to make the inference that the kid's mother is an incestial whore. (lol)
Thanks a ton for the review!
Nice lesson man
Hah, I actually thought this was kinda funny. Not laugh out loud funny, but I think it was a good little short. Decent animation and art. 3 and a half stars. Good job.
IT FUCKIN' POPPED.
*Tip's Fedora*
Mallowin responds:
Who's Tip? I'd like to meet this guy.