The singer needs to project from his diafram. On the animation spectrum. It was very nicely done. Just try to keep consistency with line size.
Reviews for "St. Stephen"
dylan responds:
I'll pass the music advice on to the singer. And yeah, working in 640x360 and expanding it to 960x540 really makes the difference so much more noticeable than I had anticipated. I'll definitely be keeping an eye on that in the future. Thanks for the review!
20 mb? jesus, but ok. lets begin:
it was, in short, nice. everything had such a sense of softness to it. the story, while simple and a little shallow, was right where it needed to be. it wasn't anything more than that, and it succeeded in what it set out to do. i did think the whole "it was all a dream" concept kinda took away from the whole experience, but it was nice regardless of that tired cliche.
the animation is where i would normally tear into it, but because it was very self aware, and it was obviously not from a seasoned animator, its quite good. the proportions on the human characters was pretty awkward though, and i would definitely work on that, but for the bear, i rather liked the design and the direction you went with it. i did notice most of the flash is 1 walking animation that you just made a new movieclip for every time a new event took place, and the reuse of the looking up animation, but i wont hold that against you. for what the story needed to be, it told it well, and you framed the shots very nicely (especially the underwater scene. it was a fantastic shot).
i don't think there's much else here to say. some choppy animation, but it held together, and it did what it needed to. i guess the song was a little mediocre for my taste, but it again worked in this. pretty nice job.
PS: yes. the only reason i found this and am reviewing it is because of your comment on my newspost. i honestly wasn't expecting to give this an entirely positive review, but here ya go
Despite the fact that he only had two legs at first, I'm glad to see that the bear grew another two so he could walk normally.
dylan responds:
I took this critique back to the animation lab. Your qualm has been resolved in the updated video.
Te animation is quite nice, though slightly repetitive. It could've used a little more variety, and having the polar bear walking and only the background changing to convey the sense of travel was nice (although slightly overused) the first time. The third, I was weary.
The song was nice though and fit really well with the animation. But I felt cheated by the ending. I fell that ending whatever with "...but it was just a dream" is cheating the audience out of a proper ending and is one of the cheapest gimmicks for giving a punch to a piece. If not for that, I would've given at least one more.
Nonetheless, keep up! I'm sure there's even better stuff where that game from!
Soooooooooooo boring.......
dylan responds:
I know, right? I wonder what piece of shit made this awful animation. Probably some total loser.