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Reviews for "New Eden - Pilot"

Very awkward, long, and drawn out. The comedic timing is amateurish, the voices are obnoxious, and the jokes are uninspired.

I know how it must feel when you're an animator and you take a long time drawing something and you want to leave it on the screen for as long as possible so everybody gets a good long look at it, but this really needs to be faster paced. Your 6 minute cartoon feels like it's 20 minutes. The best part was the first minute when things were happening all at once and it threw stuff in your face and didn't waste your time.

I would say the quintessential sci-fi comedy cartoon is Futurama, which is saturated with jokes. It's just funny funny funny over and over again with a gag every few seconds and no boring gaps in between. Yeah, that's hard to do. But you gotta make sure you try to throw as many gags at your audience as possible and find every opportunity to do so. And don't milk just one joke because there's a chance it was never funny in the first place. The red button thing was groan-worthy. I feel like you had maybe 2 minutes worth of quality content, so drawing it out to 6 minutes makes your audience just wanna leave.

So... make the characters charming and likable, pick up the pace, don't reuse jokes, don't draw things out, and be original and inspired.

NewEdenseries responds:

Just wanted to say thanks for the feedback. All good solid criticism that we can use. Look forward to hearing what you think of the Shorts. Cheers!

Hm. Interesting. Reminded me of Star Wars, when they flow (fell) away from the green monster.
But I believe we wouldn't be fighting like that, if the situation was real =D

A well-done Animation (no comments on the plot).

Ugghh - I hate how this always happens!

Some awesome, talented individuals work their arses off and create an awesome promo for an upcoming series. It's always, slick, well-made and obviously well fueled by enthusiasm. But for some reason their always kind of... lame. I don't know why, whenever there's a big production like this, it always makes me cringe... there are examples but dammit I can't remember their names. The only exception from this is T.O.M.E. - maybe because it was based off of a series made by on person that wasn't trying to look cool or modern. And even that (I feel) is in danger of becoming boring if the characters aren't developed more.

This has the same problems - flat characters, flat jokes, and a flat storyline. But like the others, it has so much potential. Maybe the problem lies in trying too hard. trying too hard to look cool, to impress the audience, and missing the point - just go where your heart takes you - use a storyline and joke that YOU like - not ones that you think the audience will find appealing. That way it will seem less... flaccid.

Nevertheless I look forward to the upcoming shorts. I'm sorry if I've been to harsh - feel free to criticise - I hope you prove me wrong in future!

Good Luck! :)

NewEdenseries responds:

Hey there. Thanks for taking the time to review New Eden. We always welcome input and hope you dig the shorts a bit more than the pilot.

The first short is now up. Check out 'Mating Call' and let us know what you think:
http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/599199

i wish that newgrounds was just a million episodes of this awesome series

I enjoyed this, but it felt like it could do so much better. The characters feel static and boring, and the timing on the jokes is off, in that there were too many open, awkward pauses. That being said, it was still decently funny and i do hope to see more.

NewEdenseries responds:

Thanks for your review, look forward to hearing what you think of the series of New Eden Shorts that we'll be releasing over the coming weeks.

The intentional awkward pauses/stilted timing in the pilot seems to really divide our audience ... some love it and for others it just doesn't gel for them.

We're listening to all feedback though as it helps us plan how to move ahead with future episodes.