Not bad, but could be so much better!
The small humorous jabs are what make this movie funny, but for what your sequence is about, it should've been a lot short. It started dragging on towards the end there without enough comedy to hold it up. I stuck it out to see if there was a good ending, but was a little disappointed.
Not bad overall, but I look forward to improvement :)
I gave it a '3' and a 6 out of 10