If you want to be a writer...
If you want to be a writer than BE A WRITER. You don't have to get into game design to tell stories. The game play isn't that bad, but having to sit through pages of dialog that all lead up to the same mission again and again is about as much fun as it sounds (it's not). Besides that, a lot of the opening text is redundant (outer-space planet?). Go back to the drawing board and try again.