the narration was great! even though the story was wrong lmao i love the seen with the child and his father lmao reminds me of ren &stimpy. so many great memories thank you sir
Reviews for "Repercussions of Evil"
This is brilliant. Being a fan of the Doom series made me enjoy this even more. It was really funny.
Awesome and awesomely funny! I've always loved seeing horribly written fan-fics come to life by an artists touch. Ever since I saw a small flash years ago where a child was telling a story and the father decided to record the story and then animate it using his sons narration. It was utterly hilarious because of the child's unpredictable imagination.
Thank you for making my day!
This was a great rendition of the story, regardless of the original story's terrible grammar. In fact, the grammatical failure made it funnier (which seems to happen frequently on the Internet). The art fit perfectly in each scene, and the audio was nice as well.
Brilliant, but flawed
First of all, great job. The animation is more than adequate, and the flashback scene is particularly refined. The art also edges into excellent. The missile dodge is particularly impressive.
The little additions are gems, the Cernel notes, the blow up the wall part, "ammo, do not sit on," and the crackerbox, plasmaed! Great, really great. They are funny without trying too hard, and I can certainly appreciate attention to detail.
The scene transitions do it in a way that actually make cinematic sense. Kudos there as well.
Likewise with the music. It actually got my ticker pumping a little.
"So," you might ask, "That all sounds good. Why the seven?"
The good has been squared away, now the bad.
It might be because I saw the Gmod version, but the voice itself was a little odd. Although his is obviously satire, but give it a listen. It knows what it is. This feels a little...schizophrenic.
To clarify: The lines "John plasmaed at him, and tried to blew him up" were delivered in an absolutely hilariously perfect way. Absolutely perfect, and that's what knocked me right out of the genuine immersion I had actually gained, because you had done such a great job salvaging such a horrid story. The cyber-demon's appearance was great, but also added to the whiplash. There were other parts, like the mutating-face dad, but that was the breaking point. You did a good job on both, but I feel it fell just slightly short of what it could have been. Inches, but visible all the same.
And then there's the fact that in the beginning, the narrator voice sounds like he's having trouble getting enough air, and has to whisper, rather than dramatic. It picks up steam as it goes on. "Far too late for now" makes you sound like a fake Brit. I.E. Trying just a bit too hard. And why did the Cernel lose his accent? These are nitpicks, but in a video this short, I have time to bring them up.
And lastly: the ugly. The art style jumps around with the narrative style. It doesn't necessarily detract, but it's noticeable while thinking about it. People's faces go from looking Serious and Normal, and Wacky and Fun. Art styles go from Detailed and Gritty, to Simple and Fluffy. Remember how I said it "edges into excellent?" It also edges the other way into "average."
A score of seven seems a little low, so I will make one final justification: the source material. It was comedic gold, and already "complete" in its ridiculousness. With an already complete setup, I can't bring myself to grade you on the story, which leaves me with the media itself. This may seem a bit harsh, but I think it's fair.
I understand you had your circumstances, but I am doing my best to be impartial, as a biased human being, it's very difficult. Plus being impartial to one's own preferences sounds a bit paradoxical.
In any case. Please, keep creating. This is a great rendition of the story. While it didn't make me howl with laughter like my first discovery, I still watched it six times in a row, noticing something new each time. I was laughing all the while.
I really, really wanted to give this a nine. I don't think I'll ever give anything a ten, so Kudos, again.
I look forward to your next work.
-X
Galneda responds:
It speaks volumes as a high compliment to me that you signed up for an account and this was the first thing you've reviewed. I signed up specifically to review Rockman Neo, and I think my review for it was tiny as hell compared to this. Thank you so much for the time and leaving no stone unturned. It's really valuable to me!
This review made me rewatch it a couple of times so I was up to speed. lol
I don't know what my deal was when I VO'd as the narraration, but I agree that it's whispery and it seems like I'm running out of breath. A lot of the lisping that I can't seem to ignore was attributed to the braces I was wearing at the time. Admittedly I'm still inexperienced at doing the deep and dramatic, but I'm not hearing or picking up on the "fake Brit I.E." @ "far too late for now anyway." detail... With practice I'm sure I'll nail it.
I can see how it might feel a little schizophrenic, seeing as how one guy is doing ALL of the voices...and I'm beginning to realize one voice can only go so far. I didn't think I lost the Colonel's accent near the end, but I certainly don't like how the line came out; I heard that track so goddamn much replaying it over and over as I was working on this thing that I began to think it sounded like him saying "You ARE the penis" and I was debating if it was worth the time to rerecord it for THAT line. lol ...but a lot of details were scrapped to save time:
-The "Push to open secret door" was supposed to be an easter egg of the original storyboard with the original, copyright-protected music I initially set the animation's pace to.
-"He going to kill us" demons were supposed to be more lively and animated, goofier
-at the "NO! I must kill the demons!" His arm and hand were supposed to react to the lines
-the ceiling collapsing was supposed to be frame by frame
-the ending was supposed to show John as the zombie prying himself from the rubble and doing a pose and wink before the credits
and on and on and on...
I would REALLY like to be really good at doing detailed and gritty, and I'd REALLY like to do good simple and fluffy as well, but what wound up happening with Doom:RoE is it sort of became a testing ground for both, and in some instances, the simple and fluffy shoved into place to cut a corner so the deadline was met...and even then, it was turned in with spots unfinished. The submission before you was, at the end, just kind of slopped together, because if I kept nitpicking it would be another couple of months before it touched the internet. I got impatient with it.
Like Dad's transforming face as he was yelling: I was getting kind of hung up on the spot, drawing, not liking how it was turning out, redoing, over and over again until I settled on the final one you see...a lot of exasperation and getting intimidated by that deadline caused some major changes from the original storyboard.
You could have given me a three as the review's score, and I still would have loved and appreciated it for all of its honesty and precision. :D I'm setting my sights on better material, hoping to get it done quicker, better, fuller, and I'm looking forward to wrenching scores of ten from people that share your point of view on criticism.
I WILL keep creating, and badass critiques like this fuel me like high octane when I've been running on cheap sludge. If THIS, of all things, was good enough to watch six times in a row and NOT be repulsed, I gotta see what happens when I aim higher.
Thank you, so much. If you're genuinely new to the site, welcome! There are plenty of other submissions out there who could use the change of pace from your everyday "a couple of sentences" reviews. What you're doing by taking your time with these reviews is mighty helpful to the author, and all of us could use a fresh perspective :D
I look forward to your next review.
-G-