Okay definitely experimental smooth rock I think. Yes the guitar is pretty cool, I like the solos which remind me a little of a jazz style actually. You seem to hop through keys frequently while still sounding consistent, which is very nice. The vocals I think could use some help hahahaha. Their mixing sounds a bit too blended in with the instrumentals making it a little difficult to hear. And I think your singing needs more power behind it I think, just more emotion and oomph to keep my attention since it just sounded on one plateau to me. But I have to say, I enjoy when you harmonized with yourself in the chorus and in other injections. I think supporting your vocals with harmonies or even doubling over would really help bring more power. As your vocals sounded on one plateau to me, I also thought the instrumentals could use some more dramatic changing up, perhaps for the second verse or the bridge appendage towards the end. So yeah, I think this song is pretty smooth and connected, it just needs some tweaking to make some pop to it. Nice work!
Reviews for "Empty"
Thanks for the review Zipper!
Yeah the vocals were not spot on, i should have given a little more power to them, i agree :)
This is an NGADM Round 1 review.
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The really great factor of this track that gives it its charm is the human touch you add to it. I'm not 100% certain whether the guitar(s) are real or not but they sound real, and the piano sounds lovely, giving this track a nice amount of expression. You've got some really good compositional ideas, and there's a good amount of depth in your composition, along with some nicely-chosen chords. Then there are the vocals of course, which contribute the most to the expressive, authentic kind of sound that this track has. I also quite like your lead guitar solo almost halfway through the track.
There are unfortunately quite a few issues with this. The singing style feels very heavy and slow. For a ballad-like track at a tempo like this, the vocals need more emotion and power (also they were hard to understand, which is a shame since the lyrics were great). In fact, the track in general is lacking in power. The drums are lacking in low end and feel too thin, for starters. Also, the singing occasionally goes out of tune, although you're a pretty good singer so it just takes a bit more practice!
Anyway, this was a nice track, with some production issues that need ironing out. You've got some excellent ideas and I enjoyed it. Good work man.
Score: 7.2/10
Thanks for the detailed review Step!
The more human the song is the more fun i have, unfortunately my recording material is very low quality so the more "real" tracks i have the harder it gets to mix everything properly and the vocals suffered a lot from that.
Recording vocals is incredibly frustrating and i got to a point where i just tolerated the flaws it had.
Yes the guitars are quite real xD
Im in need of serious vocal ideas...was the melody weak?...was my singing weak?...was the mixing weak?...double track?...so much questions!! SOMEONE TUTOR ME!!! xD
Thanks Step :D
You have an amazing sense of progression, and your chords are wonderful. I feel like I could learn a thing or two from you. Your guitar and piano are well played, and the drums are tasteful and minimalist. I already get the sense of staring out to a window.
I have no complaints about mixing.
A few pickles:
1) For words involving ripping one's flesh etc., more expression is due. A guitar riff? A crescendo in general? Emptiness can be expressed, but those lyrics sound edgy, angry, and need the anger to couple it.
2) I have to agree with alternativesolution on your enunciation. It sounds muddled and dragged through. Clarity could heighten the feelings this piece is trying to convey. If in doubt, try overpronouncing your syllables. Don't do so too close to the mic, but try regardless -- with changes in volume where needed. And perhaps, you'll find a world of difference.
3) The lyrics are generally well-written, but could use tweaking in places.
All in all, pretty solid, even with its kinks.
6.9/10.
First of all you couldn't learn anything from me...sadly xD
Thanks for the kind words and i agree with the critics, unfortunately i still haven't found a good singing technique+Mixing that elevates the song instead of drowning it without power but i love to do vocal songs and maybe ill get it better next time :)
Thanks for the review Trois! :D
Wow nice
I love the soft playing here but the lyrics really seemed to kick in here very well, While not perfect it does bring its own style and creativity to the portal and I can see you advancing on this one even more, this was a solid track awsome lyrics and nice backround sound to accent the lyrics
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